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Delise Fantome's avatar

Oh shit, that cliffhanger! But dawn maybe Marshall should have dug a liiiiitle further than just, "know the name, know the place, kill" poor dude lol

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James Worth's avatar

my guy is really doing what he can with the tools he’s got lol. unfortunately his toolbox is essentially empty :/

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Delise Fantome's avatar

Damn, real

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erb's avatar

I'm shocked this doesn't have more likes. It's been a while since I've read something that made me feel like this. Your prose is so precise and glittering. It doesn't feel like a single word is out of place, yet I am completely immersed in Marshall's world and the story. You have also captured a narrative timelessness that I think has become more rare as the internet eclipses everything—I could believe this book was written decades ago. I can't wait to keep reading !

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James Worth's avatar

Wow. Every word of this is so kind and thoughtful. I'm so so happy to hear that you're enjoying the story, it means the world to me. Thank you for sharing your excitement, it is so encouraging, I hope you like the rest of the novel just as much!

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J.M. Ransom's avatar

Oh shitttttt…

These characters all feel so… real. Marshall especially, but they’re all people I could’ve plausibly met in real life. They’re very grounded, physically anchored in the unique descriptions of their bodies.

“The drug-taking sometimes seems like an elaborate choreographed dance she performs to tempt death into fucking her senseless for a while” …Okay, I get the appeal of Lana now.

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Caz Hart's avatar

Oh crap!! 😵‍💫

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Bob Graham's avatar

Oh shit! This is gettin’ spicy.

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Vince Roman's avatar

Retro ejaku!!!

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James Worth's avatar

This chapter was actually way longer originally lol, it was rightfully trimmed down to just the right amount of maximalism I think.

You’ve got a good eye, that’s one of my favorite lines in the whole thing !! Thank you for sharing your enjoyment, it absolutely fills my little heart.

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